Black Ghost

I thought it was pretty humorous in some parts, although I didn't really care for the way that you spoke directly to the reader. I say this because you didn't ...

I really liked the flowers. They looked very soft and breezy, which is very serene and beautiful looking. But I think the noblewoman needs some work though. Her expression seems ...

Just a few typo stuff... onwards ; cursing each of the cars that drove past and sprayed her with icy slush-water. I think you need a comma instead of a ...

Yes, I agree. Some phrases like "already preoccupied" just seemed too long to have any natural flow with the rest of the poem. Also, I though the way you punctuated ...

It seems a little long. And it creates sort of strange image. Unique, though. :P The Voices Are Many

Hi! Interesting story you've got here. Although I admit it was a little confusing, you've got quite a bit of drama built up to start. :P She slipped down the ...

It's some nice description, but you need more. There really isn't enough to give a proper critique. I mean, how are we supposed to know what's happening from a snipit? ...

If you focus on the darkness outside your definite ring of light, Your trying to makes something surreal with this piece. By adding a technical term like the word definite, ...

I really enjoyed this. :D It was one of those pieces that I just couldn't stop reading until the end. As far as criticism goes, I have mostly none. All ...

For more information about Obsessive-Compulsive Disorder, look here. *** Austin was washing his hands. A steady stream of lukewarm water enveloped them in a frothy whiteness as he harshly rubbed ...

I would consider adding some breaks between the different parts. I don't know if its just me, but I was really confused the first time through. I thought one second ...

Previous Stories: I've attempted quite a few novels since I began writing, and I don't think most of them were all that great to begin with. :? The first story ...

If scientists, when doing an experiment expect or want certain results, would they affect the experiment? If this were true, the only way to get accurate results would be to ...

Hey there! I tried to read this, but honestly, there are much to much punctation, spelling, and grammar errors. I woke up to the feel warmth. I woke up to ...

Kylan! Despite previous comments, I actually found this quite engaging. I thought the italicised portion served its purpose by establishing the tone and overall feel of the rest of the ...